Revised Introduction

In this post I will be completely revise my thesis for my essay. I think my new introduction clearly articulates what I am going to address over the course of my essay. I also focus more on the writer and article itself and the rhetorical strategies that the author employs. This is also good because that is the goal of the project.

Old thesis:
With the rise of technology in the late twentieth-century, and especially now in the twenty-first century, reading has been transformed into different forms. Most recently, Amazon launched the first e-reader in 2007 with the release of the "Kindle." In addition to e-books, audiobooks have also gained popularity especially with the release of online streaming services like iTunes and Amazon Audibles. Audiobooks enhance the act of storytelling through the use of narration to further supplement the reader's imagination and alleviate the task of reading. John Schwartz, a writer for The New York Times, effectively uses the rhetorical strategy of personal expertise in order to strengthen his argument.


Revised thesis: 
Audiobooks have increased in popularity in the last couple decades based on the introduction of new technology and a higher demand for more leisurely, accessible reading. New York Times writer John Schwartz analyzes the commercial success of audiobooks in his article, "Sound Check." Certain characteristics are essential to a successful audiobook. Schwartz uses the rhetorical strategies of personal expertise and anecdotes in order to create a personal connection with the reader, which very much mirrors the intended goal of audiobooks - to have the reader empathize with the story being told.

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