Paragraph Analysis 2

In this exercise I will be discussing the paragraph analysis I completed. I went paragraph by paragraph to analyze each one. I realized I could organize them more in terms of logos, pathos and ethos and make my conclusion paragraph tie together more some of the different ideas presented. Also I think I could lengthen some of my paragraphs to include more quotes and analysis in order to strengthen my thesis. Otherwise I think my grammar is pretty good and I worked hard to have good topic sentences.

Here is a link to my paragraph analysis.

Mozart, Wolfgangus. "Spoons." 2009 via Wikipedia. Creative Commons License.